I've decided to revise my literacy analysis paper. For one, I got a low B on it which was the lowest grade out of all three papers. I also think I could do way better on it. It seems, to me, that I didn't summarize the story, but since Dr. D said I did, I guess I could improve the order of my story. That would fall in the organization category for a trait of good writing.
The other trait of good writing I would focus on would be content. As I'm reading more of the comments on my paper, I do see what she means about the summarizing. I should add more of my own thoughts. I should also support my quotations more. In my mind, the things I'm trying to say are already supported by the quotes, but that's something I need to change. Besides those two traits, we all need to work on word choice and conventions because that's something you would need to do anyway.
Reading Times: (Fallout by Ellen Hopkins) 3/19- 20 minutes, 3/20- 20 minutes, 3/21- 15 minutes, 3/22- 15 minutes, 3/24- (Jane Goodall Post) 25 minutes, 3/25- 30 minutes, 3/25 (this post, turnitin)- 30 minutes
Total: 155 minutes
Monday, March 25, 2013
Sunday, March 24, 2013
Jane Goodall Plagiarized
The fact that Jane Goodall plagiarized in her latest book seems serious to me. For one, at our school we have serious consequences if we plagiarize. Secondly, she just threw passages in there without paraphrasing a little bit. It seems as if Jane Goodall took the matter lightly because all she said was sorry. I thought if things like that happened you could get sued or something, but from the article, it seems that no one has taken any action to tell Goodall that she may have to pay a fee or she can't sell her book. I am very surprised that this happened, especially since it was sometimes paragraphs that were not given credit to the actual author.
I think they should correct it by not selling the books that have already been copied even though that may waste money. They could also have like an extra page of the book where it says all the sources, or she could have a page or something official where she puts all the information that she took on it. Another thing I questioned was why didn't the publisher of the book read it before they made copies of the book. Aren't they suppose to check for mistakes, errors, or anything that is wrong with a book? They need to introduce the authors of the things they stole, paraphrase, quote, and anything else. How could they be so careless? Even I know to do such things. It may be difficult for them to look through the entire book, word by word, but since it was published for everyone to read with her name on it, it was pretty serious.
I think they should correct it by not selling the books that have already been copied even though that may waste money. They could also have like an extra page of the book where it says all the sources, or she could have a page or something official where she puts all the information that she took on it. Another thing I questioned was why didn't the publisher of the book read it before they made copies of the book. Aren't they suppose to check for mistakes, errors, or anything that is wrong with a book? They need to introduce the authors of the things they stole, paraphrase, quote, and anything else. How could they be so careless? Even I know to do such things. It may be difficult for them to look through the entire book, word by word, but since it was published for everyone to read with her name on it, it was pretty serious.
Monday, March 18, 2013
Nervous Condition Thoughts
I think the upcoming ninth graders should read Nervous Conditions. It will enrich their minds on a totally different community than we live in now. They may become more grateful on the things they have, and they may realize that life is rough for a lot of people in this world. Also, it is one of the books where after you finish reading it, you know exactly what to put for the essential question that is asked for from each book we read, "How do community and culture shape who we are?"
As I see it, the book was pretty good. I couldn't really relate to most of the things they were talking about, but I was able to comprehend what they were going through in my head. The struggles of this and that, and why they did that and this. The discussions raised in class were helpful to the thought process of the book so I was rarely confused of which direction Tambu was going in while telling the story.
Readers will also gain a large amount of knowledge about Zimbabwe(Rhodesia) in the 1960's and will learn a lot about the culture. Varying from language, patriarchal society, food, social class systems,etc., it definitely wouldn't hurt to learn about those different aspects. Furthermore, thinking about how class systems and patriarchal societies are still occurring in a watered-down state in Zimbabwe now will also help distinguish the growth of their community and culture.
As these 9th graders ponder for more questions about this book, Dr. deGravelles will be giving more answers which will help them succeed for the final exam. Not only will it help them think beyond the essential question for the books, but also they will think beyond the question and take it into consideration for their own lives.
Reading Times: 3/17- 3 hours for interview and film study paper
3/17- 2 hours of reading Fallout by Ellen Hopkins
As I see it, the book was pretty good. I couldn't really relate to most of the things they were talking about, but I was able to comprehend what they were going through in my head. The struggles of this and that, and why they did that and this. The discussions raised in class were helpful to the thought process of the book so I was rarely confused of which direction Tambu was going in while telling the story.
Readers will also gain a large amount of knowledge about Zimbabwe(Rhodesia) in the 1960's and will learn a lot about the culture. Varying from language, patriarchal society, food, social class systems,etc., it definitely wouldn't hurt to learn about those different aspects. Furthermore, thinking about how class systems and patriarchal societies are still occurring in a watered-down state in Zimbabwe now will also help distinguish the growth of their community and culture.
As these 9th graders ponder for more questions about this book, Dr. deGravelles will be giving more answers which will help them succeed for the final exam. Not only will it help them think beyond the essential question for the books, but also they will think beyond the question and take it into consideration for their own lives.
Reading Times: 3/17- 3 hours for interview and film study paper
3/17- 2 hours of reading Fallout by Ellen Hopkins
Monday, March 11, 2013
Mission vs Homestead
Tambu's perspective about the homestead changed. They had the filthy latrines instead of the nice, clean toilets. The conditions of the house on the homestead was tattered while the mission was neat and structural. Tambu has to work harder at the homestead because of the worse conditions.
I, too, also help clean up more when I'm at my house than when at a friend's house. This reason being that whenever I go to someone else's house, their house is usually clean, and the parents like to cater to the guest. I act different in some classes depending on the teacher. For example, I may talk more or doze off in a class depending on what class I am in.
Reading Details: 3/9/13- Worked on vocab test (60 min), Type up close reading (15), read Nervous Conditions (30 min). 3/8/13- reading Nervous Conditions (60 min). 3/10/13- worked on reading guides (30 min)
Total: 195 minutes
I, too, also help clean up more when I'm at my house than when at a friend's house. This reason being that whenever I go to someone else's house, their house is usually clean, and the parents like to cater to the guest. I act different in some classes depending on the teacher. For example, I may talk more or doze off in a class depending on what class I am in.
Reading Details: 3/9/13- Worked on vocab test (60 min), Type up close reading (15), read Nervous Conditions (30 min). 3/8/13- reading Nervous Conditions (60 min). 3/10/13- worked on reading guides (30 min)
Total: 195 minutes
Free Post: Track Meets
I started track season about a month ago in January. I was kind of excited since it was my first track season as a high schooler, and I was determined to beat high schoolers from other schools in the hurdles because that was my favorite event, and I had done so in previous years. At practice, I practice sprints the most, though, instead of hurdles when I should be doing both like every other day. Even without practicing I was pretty confident that I was going to win in a meet without practice. I was wrong. During the first track meet, I didn't warm up as much as I should have so I ended up getting sixth. It happened the same way for the second track meet which was Saturday because my form was horrible even though at practice my form is good... when I actually practice the hurdles.
Now I'm really trying to get at least third for the track meet coming up Friday. I will get at least that. I have promised myself to practice with all ten hurdles when I'm at practice. Practicing using the blocks and getting my footwork right will also be a key thing in my success. Also getting timed so I can know my speed and what things I can do to get my time faster. I am so ready. I will practice until I get a time that I know would win a meet. I have to get low on the hurdles too because that split second of jumping too high will take away on my time. I will be ready for Friday!
Now I'm really trying to get at least third for the track meet coming up Friday. I will get at least that. I have promised myself to practice with all ten hurdles when I'm at practice. Practicing using the blocks and getting my footwork right will also be a key thing in my success. Also getting timed so I can know my speed and what things I can do to get my time faster. I am so ready. I will practice until I get a time that I know would win a meet. I have to get low on the hurdles too because that split second of jumping too high will take away on my time. I will be ready for Friday!
Monday, March 4, 2013
Babamukuru
That darn girl ruining my reputation with her whorish ways. How dare that girl, that Nyasha speak back to me in such a tone. I am the man, the provider, the educated of this house. No one shall go against my will, my way in that manner, and if it should go that way, both of us, her first, will never see another day.
I shall help my brother, Jeremiah. He is not providing, therefore I will send one of his children to school so that they can have a better chance at helping out the family. The hierarchy and reputation of all our families shall remain, and I will not let it deteriorate. Everyone outside of this family will not see the the real struggle of the homestead. I will help them. I will help them all!
Reading Times: 2/26-3/1- 60 minutes of reading Nervous Conditions by Tsitsi Dangarembga. 2/26-3/1 - 60 minutes of annotating. 2/28-3/1 - 85 minutes of working on projects
Total: 205 mins
I shall help my brother, Jeremiah. He is not providing, therefore I will send one of his children to school so that they can have a better chance at helping out the family. The hierarchy and reputation of all our families shall remain, and I will not let it deteriorate. Everyone outside of this family will not see the the real struggle of the homestead. I will help them. I will help them all!
Reading Times: 2/26-3/1- 60 minutes of reading Nervous Conditions by Tsitsi Dangarembga. 2/26-3/1 - 60 minutes of annotating. 2/28-3/1 - 85 minutes of working on projects
Total: 205 mins
Sunday, March 3, 2013
Layer Reflection
I have finished the first part of my Nervous Conditions layered project. It wasn't really hard at all. The hardest part of it was the annotating because it took longer for me to read everything that was necessary in order for me to start the projects, but it was helpful. I annotated heavily, so hopefully I got a perfect score on that. In the future, I will try to read ahead so I can have the annotating part out of the way since it takes me so long. The most satisfying was the reading guides because I have done that type of stuff since I was in like third or fourth grade. I knew what to do, and I answered each part of the questions.
The least helpful thing was the vocabulary test. Even if I didn't understand a particular word I could sort of figure out what it meant by the context clues. Therefore, I didn't feel like I needed to do all of that just to put it in context to understand the book, but to just make an imprint in my mind to remember it for knowledge. None of the assignments I did were not satisfying because they all helped me in some type of way.
The least helpful thing was the vocabulary test. Even if I didn't understand a particular word I could sort of figure out what it meant by the context clues. Therefore, I didn't feel like I needed to do all of that just to put it in context to understand the book, but to just make an imprint in my mind to remember it for knowledge. None of the assignments I did were not satisfying because they all helped me in some type of way.
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